A good beginning. It will be interesting to see where this goes. One minor quibble. When discussing the idea of spreading snow, Fess mentions that "...it will take a great many cubic kilograms of ice..." "Cubic" is a term used with volume and "kilogram" is one of weight...
I remember reading in another sci-fi novel; One of the characters disposed of a dragon by organizing all of the dragon's atomic (heat) energy into a single vector. Said dragon instantly accelerated into the ground and left quite a hole. I also heard an interesting experiment that some students are d...
Right - As the author said, this is only intended to be a short story, and has threatened to become a novella (although I have read "short stories" that were much longer than this one.) We can't expect on of Dr. S's sagas with a cast of thousands on a 20,000 word budget :D Dr. S: In a sens...
The story seems to be drawing to a satisfying ending. A good piece, on a number of levels. Now the criticism. Charlotte mentions that she would "pedal" her charcoal; I'm sure she meant "peddle" it. Spell checkers don't do context, unfortunately. and in the line: "Okay, then,...
Story's advancing nicely. Good history lessons - any story that makes me want to read up on history is a good one - and I like the way you can get into the head of a Victorian woman so believably. You're broadening the vista in terms of showing us how many different people are working for the Doc wi...
Ashamed to admit that I have not been following this one very closely... I have as much interest in baseball as I have in football (American and European alike,) curling, lacrosse, rap 'music,' MTV, Paris Hilton's love love, or Eugene, Oregon. (Or anywhere in Oregon, for that matter.) The concept is...