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by kf6eml
Wed Mar 27, 2013 6:12 pm
ForumCOLON Chris's Friends Fiction
TopicCOLON Financial Freedom
RepliesCOLON 21
ViewsCOLON 22564

Re: Financial Freedom

Sorry. It isn't my intent to be terse, it's just that I'm usually doing several things at once, and don't put nearly enough attention into the follow-up after reading something. I DO pause my TV when I'm reading, but I usually have at least half a dozen tabs open with various news or information pag...
by kf6eml
Wed Mar 27, 2013 1:18 am
ForumCOLON Chris's Friends Fiction
TopicCOLON Financial Freedom
RepliesCOLON 21
ViewsCOLON 22564

Re: Financial Freedom

"poured" should be "pored"

he tried not to fall asleep as he poured over the Federation intelligence reports

"through" probably should be "that"

searching for any detail through would help him
by kf6eml
Tue Mar 12, 2013 11:48 pm
ForumCOLON New Fiction
TopicCOLON The Afterlife of Saint Vidicon
RepliesCOLON 2
ViewsCOLON 6513

Re: The Afterlife of Saint Vidicon

The link at the bottom of the second part seems to be self-referential... Is this intended to be humorous? Because it is. I found a couple problems, but not much serious: Typo Then the light itself began to dwindle and to darkened, until he groped within a lightless place. Mixing tenses yet he did r...
by kf6eml
Tue Mar 12, 2013 8:56 am
ForumCOLON Chris's Friends Fiction
TopicCOLON Financial Freedom
RepliesCOLON 21
ViewsCOLON 22564

Re: Financial Freedom

Only found one typo in pt 14.

particular = particularly

Heth didn't particular like having his mane cropped,


Still moving pretty well. Dialogue is good, and seems natural.

That's all I got today.
by kf6eml
Tue Mar 12, 2013 2:42 am
ForumCOLON Announcements
TopicCOLON Back surgery
RepliesCOLON 6
ViewsCOLON 9997

Re: Back surgery

Typing requires sitting up straight, which is good, but I can only do it for so long before I have to lean back or lie down. In fact, I can't do any one thing for too long before having to change to some other position. Between answering email and writing two replies on this forum, I'm about at my l...
by kf6eml
Tue Mar 12, 2013 2:26 am
ForumCOLON Chris's Friends Fiction
TopicCOLON Financial Freedom
RepliesCOLON 21
ViewsCOLON 22564

Re: Financial Freedom

If you wait for it to be perfect, then you will never publish it. I forget which wise man said, "Let not the perfect be the enemy of the good." (It's usually attributed to Voltaire) What do you want to get out of it? You of all people should know that to be a professional author, you must ...
by kf6eml
Mon Mar 11, 2013 10:18 am
ForumCOLON Chris's Friends Fiction
TopicCOLON Financial Freedom
RepliesCOLON 21
ViewsCOLON 22564

Re: Financial Freedom

Wow. Been SOOO long since I've read this story.... Here are the typos I found in CH 13: every = ever Miao Mercantile's super-freighter class were the largest civilian starships every constructed in K'Nes space Agreed = agree "I'd have to agreed," Heth nodded—or tried, rather. The sleek bla...
by kf6eml
Fri Mar 08, 2013 10:46 pm
ForumCOLON Announcements
TopicCOLON Back surgery
RepliesCOLON 6
ViewsCOLON 9997

Back surgery

Went in Tuesday and had a herniated disc removed. I now have titanium standing in for part of my spine. It doesn't hurt nearly as bad as you might expect; in fact, it's not even difficult going up and down stairs. Slow, but not hard. Downside is that I don't have any morphine-induced haze to use as ...
by kf6eml
Sun Mar 03, 2013 3:08 pm
ForumCOLON Gramarye
TopicCOLON Ebooks & Warlocks
RepliesCOLON 8
ViewsCOLON 10125

Re: Ebooks & Warlocks

I like the new guy
by kf6eml
Sun Feb 24, 2013 7:36 am
ForumCOLON Chris's Friends Fiction
TopicCOLON The Boozy Banshee of Brannock-A-Bend
RepliesCOLON 7
ViewsCOLON 10237

Re: The Boozy Banshee of Brannock-A-Bend

Been so long since I've read anything, much less commented! So here goes: This sentence needs work... Beau had essentially brought in the two-thirds of the corn crop old man Murphy’s horse had left by himself to the cheers of the patrons of McNally’s bar There's a dangling participle in there; I had...

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