Return With Your Spacesuit or On It
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Return With Your Spacesuit or On It
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Re: Return With Your Spacesuit or On It
Interesting futuristic tragedy. Seems like a set-up for larger story; is there more to come of it?
Errors I found:
Obviously meant to be a solder
soldier
An uncomfortable period of silence of silence
repeated phrase
-hang-out-with-space-cruismg-nobodies-who-will-only-get-their-common-sense-impaired-emorions-in-a-striny-gooey-lumpy-mess
cruising, emotions, stringy
wasn't going to be allowed back into die Space Academy
the
He snitched his gaze to his left,
switched?
The picture in-question
unneeded hyphen
Errors I found:
Obviously meant to be a solder
soldier
An uncomfortable period of silence of silence
repeated phrase
-hang-out-with-space-cruismg-nobodies-who-will-only-get-their-common-sense-impaired-emorions-in-a-striny-gooey-lumpy-mess
cruising, emotions, stringy
wasn't going to be allowed back into die Space Academy
the
He snitched his gaze to his left,
switched?
The picture in-question
unneeded hyphen
- Ortho the Frank
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Re: Return With Your Spacesuit or On It
Thanks! Corrected. I think those were OCR errors I missed the first time around.