Firewalker

[Ortho the Frank]

Critiques? Comments? Suggestions? Put them here!

[kf6eml]

Neat!

Only one grammatical error that I saw:

then frowned at something moving in the forest behind.

ended a sentence with a preposition.

[Ortho the Frank]

Corrected, thanks!

[kf6eml]

It's an interesting story. Particularly since I've hiked the area around Kilauea. (Can't get into the crater. They have it pretty effectively fenced-off.)