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Firewalker

PostedCOLON Tue Apr 16, 2013 7:29 pm
by Ortho the Frank
Critiques? Comments? Suggestions? Put them here!

Re: Firewalker

PostedCOLON Thu Apr 18, 2013 6:49 pm
by kf6eml
Neat!

Only one grammatical error that I saw:

then frowned at something moving in the forest behind.

ended a sentence with a preposition.

Re: Firewalker

PostedCOLON Fri Apr 19, 2013 7:09 pm
by Ortho the Frank
Corrected, thanks!

Re: Firewalker

PostedCOLON Sat Apr 20, 2013 12:12 am
by kf6eml
It's an interesting story. Particularly since I've hiked the area around Kilauea. (Can't get into the crater. They have it pretty effectively fenced-off.)