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PostedCOLON Tue Apr 16, 2013 7:29 pm
Critiques? Comments? Suggestions? Put them here!
PostedCOLON Thu Apr 18, 2013 6:49 pm
Only one grammatical error that I saw:
then frowned at something moving in the forest behind.
ended a sentence with a preposition.
PostedCOLON Fri Apr 19, 2013 7:09 pm
PostedCOLON Sat Apr 20, 2013 12:12 am
It's an interesting story. Particularly since I've hiked the area around Kilauea. (Can't get into the crater. They have it pretty effectively fenced-off.)